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The main thing that stalled me in this story was getting a temp job that just didn't leave me with energy to do much, but that was only part of the problem. I probably could have kept things moving forward if I'd known where the story was going. Now I have a clear idea, but I need a villain. So, I'm taking prompts for villains. Please leave suggestions in the comments!

I also have a brief teaser to share with you, and a poll. Want to see more? Comments here and comments on meeks ' sketch over here  will help inspire me.  Tips are also always accepted (the hat's on my profile if you ever want to tip between installments).

So, here's the teaser:

Grace and Stella developed a rhythm to their days, eating and sleeping during the day, and patrolling the parklands at night.  Stella got quite good at projecting an illusory policeman into the vicinity of troublemakers.  If it looked a bit like _________, the miscreants never commented.  They caught sight of the uniform and left.


So, how should I fill in the blank?

Poll #1768742 Pretty Park Patroller

Who does the illusion resemble?

The Full Metal Alchemist
2(11.1%)
Charlie Chaplin
4(22.2%)
Derek Morgan
1(5.6%)
Xena
5(27.8%)
Severus Snape
3(16.7%)
Bellana Torres
0(0.0%)
Ellen Ripley
1(5.6%)
Someone I haven't thought of, who you'll name in comments
2(11.1%)
I look forward to reading your suggestions!  (If anyone suggests someone else in comments, feel free to add votes in comments.)

Thanks!

P.S.  For my new friends, the story in question starts here:  Feather-Blessed


Comments

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jenny_evergreen
Aug. 11th, 2011 02:03 am (UTC)
Perhaps a dragon who got stuck and pretends like he (I tend towards a he) chose to stay and resents the girls' desire to go, etc?
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 02:52 am (UTC)
I'm also tending toward a "he", although so far all the major characters are female...I have to think about the world I'm painting, I guess.
tuftears
Aug. 11th, 2011 02:31 am (UTC)
Is it bad I didn't recognize half the names in your list? >_>

I don't know that it necessarily requires a villain... so much as that it could be a mystery. Characters versus environment, characters versus their own issues, etc. Who sent out the feathers, what are their real objectives, are these objectives necessarily good from Grace and Stella's point of view, etc.

What if... They manage to find Home, but Home sounds like a really saccharine version of My Little Pony, with some 'benevolent wizard-queen ruling wisely over everyone' and everyone doing service with little or no personal freedom because it never occurs to them that it could be otherwise, or they feel 'with great power comes great responsibility', etc.?

What if... They manage to find Home, but it turns out that they aren't wanted, the feathers are relics of some process that existed in the past to recruit more dragon/faeries/supernaturals, but now there is only so much magic to go around, and if they come in, they'll dilute the magic that much more? Overpopulation! And what if the magical fields of Earth are stronger due to not having been used in centuries - would that lead to a desire to invade Earth and take the magic back?
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 02:46 am (UTC)
It's true that stories don't always require a villain, but I've been thinking about this one for a while, and I've found a plotline that feels right, and that plot needs a villain. So I'm going with a villain.

An overprotective, allegedly-benevolent wizard-queen is a villain, however!

As to the names, Charlie Chaplin is/was an actor; the rest are fictional characters, mostly from science fiction or fantasy films or series.
tuftears
Aug. 11th, 2011 03:29 am (UTC)
Sure, but maybe if you included links to the series, people could read up on them. :) I recognized FMA, Chaplin, Xena, Snape, blanking on the others!
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 03:41 am (UTC)
Derek Morgan's kind of the odd man out, being one of the agents on Criminal Minds.

Bellana Torres is the half-Klingon engineer on Star Trek Voyager.

Ripley is from the Aliens movies. (I should admit I only know her first name because I Googled it.)
tuftears
Aug. 11th, 2011 06:42 pm (UTC)
I vaguely thought that could have been it, but I was blanking on whether Ripley was first or last name!

I voted for Charles Chaplin myself, because I could just picture him looking sad and disappointed at the miscreants. ^_^
viva_la_topknot
Aug. 22nd, 2011 01:06 am (UTC)

"Sure, but maybe if you included links to the series, people could read up on them."

I like this idea!
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 22nd, 2011 01:22 am (UTC)
Gosh, I don't even know how to watch TV series online, much less to link to them!
viva_la_topknot
Aug. 22nd, 2011 04:17 am (UTC)

You could always link to the character's/shows page! :D
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 22nd, 2011 05:22 am (UTC)
I'll remember that for next time!
bogwitch64
Aug. 11th, 2011 02:45 am (UTC)
Charlie Sheen. It was the first thing that popped into my head!
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 02:49 am (UTC)
LOL
Now you have me thinking of Farrah Fawcett...
jerusha
Aug. 11th, 2011 03:11 am (UTC)
For the policeman: Rupert Giles (Buffy's Watcher, the librarian)
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 03:29 am (UTC)
Oh!
Yes, I can see he would work.

I wonder how a librarian would work as a villain?

Also, welcome!
jerusha
Aug. 11th, 2011 03:30 pm (UTC)
Re: Oh!
Is the police image Stella produces supposed to somehow also tie into the villain? I had read that as two separate questions/characters.

I had considered Buffy, as opposed to Giles, but went with the latter for two reasons: 1) Giles, his history notwithstanding, was the avatar of law (or at least rules) and order, and 2) I couldn't picture Buffy in police uniform convincingly. (I can picture her wearing it as a costume, but not as her own, if you know what I mean.)
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 05:22 pm (UTC)
Re: Oh!
You're correct--this is unrelated to the villain. At this point in the story, they have no clue they will have a challenge to overcome that is more problematic than surviving until they can find their way to their new Home.
ankewehner
Aug. 11th, 2011 11:52 am (UTC)
Should have read the comments before voting; this is a good one.
mbumby
Aug. 11th, 2011 03:54 am (UTC)
W. C. Fields was my first thought.

But that one led me to Groucho Marx, Harpo Marx, and Winston Churchill.

(Although I'll confess I liked Charlie Chaplin, and laughed out loud at Torres.)
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 04:01 am (UTC)
I like that "laughed out loud" reaction!

Lots of interesting suggestions, too.

Good to see you here.

mbumby
Aug. 11th, 2011 02:47 pm (UTC)
Thanks. And I'm here thanks to G+ -- I'm stuck back in May in LJ-land-proper. :-)
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 05:40 pm (UTC)
Hooray for G+!
red_trillium
Aug. 11th, 2011 07:52 am (UTC)
2 thoughts:

1) GI Joe

2) what if it isn't anyone specific you name but a group of people (ie--the police, a soldier, National Guard)? That might make it appeal to more of your audience who might not recognise the names?
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 12:38 pm (UTC)
As to #1, do they even have those toys any more? I don't think this will work for a girl-turned-dragon unless I give her gender issues, however.

In response to #2, it loses the humor value if it's not someone specific and recognizable. However, finding the right name--so the audience does recognize it, and laugh--is important.

Hmm...in that vein, if I go with someone in the Buffyverse, maybe Buffy would be a better choice than Giles--you don't have to have seen the show to know her name. On the other hand, is Stella focused on a female role model or a romantic lead? That point develops her character, and could hint at how she'll react in a crisis later, and what kind of crisis would be a good challenge for her to overcome.
jenny_evergreen
Aug. 11th, 2011 12:45 pm (UTC)
I voted for Full Metal Alchemist specifically because I only recognized a couple of names on the list myself; FMA is NOT one of them, but just the name, I get a compelling image that I recognize as intended to be amusing.
With that in mine, you might want to go with a broad archetype for broad appeal.
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 05:18 pm (UTC)
I think the humor works better if I use a specific media image rather than an archetype. I can always add a bit of reference, rather than only the name (i.e. Ripley from the Aliens movies) to help jog people's memories.

Maybe I should ask the YA writers for suggestions, since if I can market it to a publisher, it will be for a younger audience

This is proving to be a more interesting and thought-provoking poll than I expected.
red_trillium
Aug. 12th, 2011 07:25 am (UTC)
Yep, I do think they have those toys still. But you are right, a Girl-Turned-Dragon might not work as well for GI Joe.

And I understand, you're looking for something to lighten this part. I'll keep it in mind and see if anything comes to mind. :)
stryck
Aug. 11th, 2011 10:52 am (UTC)
What if there's a feather-blessed dragon or gryphon who wants to get more magic, to become an even faster/stronger creature? Who knows how it goes around, finding fairies and dragons and gryphons left behind, and taking away their magic?
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 11th, 2011 12:29 pm (UTC)
That's an interesting thought. Not sure if it fits with my plot...I'll ponder it a while, though.
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