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Flash Fiction: Sometimes They Do

The sun set and I opened my eyes. The coffin was closed above me, just as it should have been, but something felt wrong.  I lay still as the dead, listening. My human servant was humming softly, unconcerned. I opened the lid.

She looked at me with a delighted smile. “You look good tonight,” she said, as she always does, but there was an extra twinkle in her eyes.

I lifted my hand toward her cheek and stopped, looking down at myself. I was covered, head to toe, in glitter paint.

She laughed gaily as I sparkled in the candlelight.

--Deirdre M. Murphy
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The form for today's bit of flash fiction is called a drabble--a bit of fiction exactly 100 words long. I had fun writing it.

I really enjoy your comments, so I hope you'll take a moment to let me know you were here.

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red_trillium
Aug. 13th, 2011 04:49 am (UTC)
I like the idea of a mischievious human servant. Usually there's a formal, master-servant relationship and I like the twist on this one.

I wonder what colour the sparkly was??
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 14th, 2011 05:59 am (UTC)
I didn't have enough words available for that, so I guess it's whatever color it was in your imagination!
ellenmillion
Aug. 13th, 2011 05:40 am (UTC)
Lol! Very enjoyable!
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 14th, 2011 06:00 am (UTC)
Glad you liked it.
ankewehner
Aug. 13th, 2011 07:22 am (UTC)
Cute little silliness.
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 14th, 2011 05:59 am (UTC)
Thank you!

I like silly, at least part of the time.
by_wjhoward
Aug. 13th, 2011 02:32 pm (UTC)
Fun story! I love writing the short short stories. They are more challenging than the long ones.
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 14th, 2011 06:00 am (UTC)
Or at least, they are challenging in different ways. Thanks for stopping by--and for commenting!
(Anonymous)
Aug. 14th, 2011 01:22 pm (UTC)
Fun
I love the juxtaposition of the vampire motif with the whimsey of the glitter paint. Made me smile.
~jon
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 14th, 2011 05:51 pm (UTC)
Re: Fun
Thank you!
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wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 23rd, 2011 02:07 am (UTC)
Re: Glittery Vampire
Thank you! I'm glad you had time to stop by.
Janet Lingel Aldrich
Aug. 27th, 2011 05:52 pm (UTC)
Too funny!
Love the relationship, but especially the Twilight spoof. Wonder what the "real" vampires think of thie "sparkly" ones? :)
wyld_dandelyon
Aug. 27th, 2011 06:26 pm (UTC)
Re: Too funny!
Thank you!
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